The Keepers (The Keepers Trillogy) (Volume 1) - J.L. Block

Sometimes I'm not sure if it's fair to criticise new, inexperienced authors on the use of passive voice and telling, not showing. After all, they're just telling a story, right? What right do I have to demand they play by some arbitrary rules someone figured out makes a 'better' narrative? It's as bad as the person who decided Mary Sues need to die in a fire despite them featuring in the most popular YA books.